Re: Re: Assignment 1

#19405
Duncan Rawlinson
Keymaster

Fantastic work on this assignment.

You’ve taken a largely unattractive, flat composition and you’ve transformed it to a three dimensional, engaging composition with a clear sense of direction.

The main technical issues with your “beast” image are:

1. It lacks focus. I’m not really sure what the visual story is
2. It’s flat with all action taking place in the same geographic layer (i.e. middle-ground)
3. It’s composition & framing is lopsided and distracting

However, all of these issues are addressed and fixed in your ‘beauty” image. You’ve told your story by focusing on only 1 of the objects on the shelf. This has helped you direct your audience’s attention to focus on only the essential elements.

You’ve made the composition less flat by positioning your camera more strategically to exaggerate foreground, middle-ground and background. For example, the dolls dress acts as a foreground object that helps guide the viewer’s eyes into the composition.

You’ve also used lighting very well which has helped you create subtle and soft yet helpful shadows which have allowed you to create the illusion of 3 dimensions in a two dimensional space.

Overall, great work on this assignment. I look forward to seeing what you accomplish next!