September 12, 2008 at 11:53 pm #17451AlexandraParticipant
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Great first assignment. I think you’ve done a really great job with this assignment. Generally students opt for the “macro” shot to make their shot more interesting, but I actually feel the interesting asymmetrical shapes of your long shot are more interesting then your close up. I’m not sure if this is what you intended, but that’s how I’m interpreting your photographs.
Let me begin by saying what I really like about this photograph. Firstly it has great lighting and balance. It looks as though you have lighting coming from three different angles (left, right and center). The lighting of the shot is warm and looks well composed. It draws attention to the different parts of the photograph and it helps guide the viewer’s eye into different areas of the shot.
I also love your use of shapes. The lamp on the right hand side creates a nice line that leads the viewer’s eye into the photograph and brings them right to the center of your photograph which is also the main interest within your photograph. Using lines is a great way to ease your viewer’s eyes into the shot as well as point them in the right direction to examine. You’ve done a great job of both of these things.
However, there are a few common mistakes in both photographs. The most obvious one is that you’ve amputated many objects in your shot. I see part of a bed, part of a blanket, part of a TV. These “parts” are “amputated” or “cut off” by one of the 4 walls of your photograph. This is undoubtedly the most common mistakes that photographers make. You focused too much on the center of the photograph and didn’t pay close enough attention to what was happening around the 4 walls of your photograph.
You can amputate objects, but you need to make sure that it’s not distracting and it’s well executed. I feel that some of the amputation in this photograph is unintentional and therefore you could have further enhanced the photograph by paying closer attention to the periphery of the picture.
Other than that, I think you’re off to a great start!September 16, 2008 at 11:54 pm #18844AlexandraParticipant
Thank you so much, I’ll do my best and pay more attention on that
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